Meeting:
Within the group meeting we have discussed the feedback we gained from the client on the script we have made for 'Cal Sugden: A Football Journey', and so far we as a group have come to a decision that we need to try and relate the documentary more to the target audience that we're trying to attract by trying to closely relate more to the younger audience on a assertional level whilst still enforcing the idea of it being a documentary. We got our music from YouTube channels that create free to use instrumentals. We had to give the channel credit in the credits of the documentary and the description of the video on YouTube as part of this.
Summarising The Feedback:
1. Have
needs/ expectations been met for the client brief and target audience?
For this assignment we were asked to create a script for either a short film or documentary that has at least five minutes’ worth of content in. Our target audience is males, aged between 12-18 years old, who are interested in football. Our script relates to them mainly down to the fact that the person we wrote about in our script is male, around the age range of our target audience and is very interested in football. Cal comes from working class background, something that the viewers, who would be in the C1, C2 and D category, could relate to. This will help them understand Cal as they could relate to some of his experiences.
We have met the client’s needs and expectations in producing our script. We mentioned all the key parts of Cal's football journey and have developed topics in the script such as his injury and motivation that will help people understand his journey and potentially inspire them while watching. The person who we have based our script on the client said was "relatable" and "aspirational". The fact that the audience also get to know Cal in depth they liked.
2.
What were the clients likes and dislikes
(be specific here)?
The Writers Group liked how we captured the passion that Cal possesses for his football and his YouTube channel. The fact that we are following his journey too from beginning to the present day they also liked. The visuals that will be displayed on screen that we stated in the script while Cal is speaking they thought was a great idea. The personal locations the client thought gives the feel to the script like you are experiencing Cal's life and are getting an insight into what happens in the life of a footballer.
3.
What are the relevant changes that need
to made to the script?
The relevant changes that we need to make are to enhance the meaning of Cal being a family person as well as a footballer. We need to develop the scene of Cal talking about his injury as the client said that this is a key part of the documentary. What we will be doing to act on this feedback is relate family/friend time to football time so there is a balance of each in the script, developing the part of the script where Cal is talking about his injury by asking him more questions and getting him to explain both the mental and physical impacts. We were also recommended to remove some of the camerawork and editing instructions as there are currently too many on the script and take up too much space.
4.
Is the content of the product correct (based
on form and style)?
The type of language that our script uses ranges from formal to informal. The questions that the interviewer will ask will be in a formal tone, but as Cal’s background isn’t a high social class, his responses will be informal. This will help the viewers understand Cal more and, as our script/documentary is aimed at the C1, C2 and D classes, this will make them feel like they are on the same level as Cal and can relate to his story. The house style we have used is one generally used in all scripts. That is using the font Courier and size 12 writing. It looks professional and is easy to read. In our script is a clear beginning, middle and end. This is essential in all scripts so the wording flows and the viewers/readers can understand the story. The mode of address used is teacher to pupil. This is because Cal is talking to the camera (the viewers) and is trying to tell his story for others to take in and potentially learn from. However, some of the language he uses makes his speech peer to peer, so the viewers can relate to him in terms of communication. Examples of this in our script is how in the intro he is very formal in describing what kind of footballer he is and how long he has been playing for. Whereas when he will be at the park re-visiting the pitches he played on when he was growing up, he will be using his colloquial phrases and informal language.
5. Does
it meet legal and ethical requirements?
Our script does meet the legal and ethical requirements required for a documentary production. The client recommended a BBFC rating of 12 for our documentary as there will be stories of injuries and infrequent mild language. With the appropriate rating, the documentary will be available for the suited audience. An example of 12 rated documentary is Senna. In Senna there are uses of mild and strong language, and disturbing images from archive footage of injuries and fatalities. However, the footage is not detailed enough for it to be seen as gory, so it was rated a 12 rated film by the BBFC. In our documentary there will be some mild language and one story of an injury that some viewers may find upsetting. This is enough to give it a 12 rating. Gaining copyright permissions for the music we will use is important. This is so that we will not be infringing any laws that may be in place. We have prevented any slander that could have occurred in our documentary. Cal is talking about his life and conveys his story in a positive light. His reputation and rights will not be damaged in the production of this documentary.
